Couples Profile Reviews

[AandC 15]

This is a new SLS profile for a newbie couple. Thanks for any feedback.

[SW_PA_Couple 4,024]

A good-looking profile, AnadC -- very alluring. Just one tiny little thing. Seeing a person listed as zero pounds raises an eyebrow.

[theflamekasters 20]

AandC said:

This is a new SLS profile for a newbie couple. Thanks for any feedback.

 

Hey nice and to the point!! I might suggest that you clarify what you mean by playing separate.

[AandC 15]

Hey nice and to the point!! I might suggest that you clarify what you mean by playing seperate.

 

Thanks...I see your point. It implies something that we are not trying to imply. I have made a change to it that I think clarifies things. Appreciate the feedback.

[theflamekasters 20]

AandC said:

Thanks...I see your point. It implies something that we are not trying to imply. I have made a change to it that I think clarifies things. Appreciate the feedback.

 

cool, that is the way we are, i think that is why i noticed!! Wish you all weren't moving to VA!!

[30sfuncouple 15]

Are we too detailed in our profile. We dont want time wasters but we may be too wordy. We are new but I also think that or weight and lack of experience may be keeping us from from getting interest.

 

thanks,

R&T

[theflamekasters 20]

Are we too detailed in our profile. We dont want time wasters but we may be too wordy. We are new but I also think that or weight and lack of experience may be keeping us from from getting interest.

 

thanks,

R&T

 

I think it is fine!

[mrssnips1 15]

I would love a review of our SLS profile. Tell me the good & the bad. I can take it.

Missy

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

Are we too detailed in our profile. We dont want time wasters but we may be too wordy. We are new but I also think that or weight and lack of experience may be keeping us from from getting interest.

 

thanks,

R&T

 

It reads fine. I am wondering how recent the picture is tho, because either it's a bit older or you guys carry your weight really well. Looking at that picture I would not say your weight would be an issue at all. What may be more of an issue for you is that you are really barely even soft-swap at this point, (same room only with spouse or possibly girl/girl - and you didn't sound too sure on the latter). Those limitations are definately going to narrow your online contacts especially because many couples are not going to want to go through the trouble of contacting a newbie couple that isn't really sure of what they are comfortable yet. You'll probably do best to stick to the clubs for a bit until you get more comfortable, in the meantime you can use SLS as a great way to see who might be at the club you are planning to attend. And if you plan ahead that you are attending you can put that in your headline and you may find you get some contacts from others who are going as well... which makes it easier to meet people when you get there.

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

I would love a review of our SLS profile. Tell me the good & the bad. I can take it.

Missy

 

Hi Missy,

 

I will say that the first few lines may leave some people thinking that your husband is screwing around on you (wife's away, but he can play). You may want to rearrange that paragraph to put the statement that you guys play seperate AND together first, then explain the current status.

 

Also, I found reading your profile difficult because your pronouns kept changing... we/they (still referring to you). It all makes it hard to keep up with and I felt like I needed to go reread several lines to make sure I understood WHO you were talking about. Keep it in either first or third person.

 

The Good: I really enjoyed the sense of humor that you put into it, a little more of that would be great, I didn't really catch it till the last little bit (BLT anyone).

[AandC 15]

SW_PA_Couple said:

A good-looking profile, AnadC -- very alluring. Just one tiny little thing. Seeing a person listed as zero pounds raises an eyebrow.

 

Thanks! We can see your point on that. It has been fixed!

[30sfuncouple 15]

Thanks for the feed back. By the way, our picture is only about 1 month old.

[theflamekasters 20]

Thanks every one for helpins us with our profile, we have had 4 emails today alone!!!

[loveohio 27]

Hi,

 

Would you guys take a look at ours? Thanks!

 

jnjlike2play on SLS

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

loveohio said:

Would you guys take a look at ours? Thanks!

 

It looks good to me. How's it working for you?

[loveohio 27]

Hi Julie,

 

We've gotten pretty steady inquiries so far, things are starting to slow down a bit.

 

We've had a couple folks who see us as "online" (when hubby is perving) and they would send several emails in an hour that progressed from "hi" to "what's your problem, why aren't you replying?!" - that's why I put the part about patience with contact at the bottom.

 

An for im - anytime I would sign on to yahoo, my screen would fill w/messages and add request windows. So I added the part at bottom about not im'ing blindly.

 

Those two things were my biggest concern - I just wondered if they came across as rude...I don't want to seem rude or snotty!

 

Thanks so much for taking a look!

[theflamekasters 20]

loveohio said:

Hi,

 

Would you guys take a look at ours? Thanks!

 

 

All i want to know is when you are comin to Texas

[theflamekasters 20]

Hi Missy,

 

I will say that the first few lines may leave some people thinking that your husband is screwing around on you (wife's away, but he can play). You may want to rearrange that paragraph to put the statement that you guys play seperate AND together first, then explain the current status.

 

Also, I found reading your profile difficult because your pronouns kept changing... we/they (still referring to you). It all makes it hard to keep up with and I felt like I needed to go reread several lines to make sure I understood WHO you were talking about. Keep it in either first or third person.

 

The Good: I really enjoyed the sense of humor that you put into it, a little more of that would be great, I didn't really catch it till the last little bit (BLT anyone).

 

 

got it right this time!! I must agree with julie on this!!

[Ed & Bunny 160]

Ok we have set up a new profile for when we are in AZ. Any comments, suggestions, or opinions would be appreciated.

[SW_PA_Couple 4,024]

Ok we have set up a new profile for when we are in AZ. Any comments, suggestions, or opinions would be appreciated.

Direct and to the point, looks like you made a good effort to let people know what you are all about and what you are expecting. Four Stars

[newbieswinger 33]

riverview9 on swinglifestyle

 

I would like some advice on my profile.

[mdcpl4swing 15]

Since we're newbies, I'd love if someone would critique our ad and let me know if there's something missing or something I should take out. Thanks in advance!

 

xxxbbwxcouplexxx @ SLS

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

newbieswinger said:

I would like some advice on my profile.

 

Overall it looks good. I did notice a missing opening ( in the second paragraph surrounding (he's great at it ladies). But you are pretty clear about what you are looking for and ok with. Just be careful with bringing people home (especially if your kids are going to be there), not everyone in the swinging world is trustworthy.

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

Since we're newbies, I'd love if someone would critique our ad and let me know if there's something missing or something I should take out. Thanks in advance!

 

xxxbbwxcouplexxx @ SLS

 

Put her weight in - no one weighs 0 and without a weight listed they (ok WE) will assume she weighs even more than she probably does. This is even more important if you don't have a good public full body picture that really shows her size. Pictures are the first thing people will notice about your profile and will cause them to either read on or close out. There have been many comments here about how tired people are of seeing nothing but boobs or ass in a picture. That is something you might want to take into consideration. There are ways to post full body pictures that don't give away your identity. Other than that it's pretty clear about what you are looking for and who you are.

[newbieswinger 33]

thanks julie, i plan on taking your advice. i never thought about security with having people over

[2inSanDiego4u 181]

newbieswinger said:

I would like some advice on my profile.

 

IMHO, just remove this line:

 

"I am nice and like others to be also. I am overweight but still look pretty good."

 

You put in the weight so not necessary.

 

You might also want to move your likes/dislikes to the "Describe Yourself" area.

 

Also, profiles with pics get a lot more attention. At least consider putting in some pics with faces cropped.

[cvcple 16]

We have been getting mixed reviews on our profile. It would be really cool to get some other opinions and thoughts on changes that should be made. Thanks.

 

cvcple on swinglifestyle.com

[JustAskJulie 2,595]

cvcple said:

It would be really cool to get some other opinions and thoughts on changes that should be made. Thanks.

 

I'm curious when you say you've been getting mixed reviews, do you mean from people that you've contacted?

 

My thoughts on your profile:

I found this bit a confusing: "We are a full swap couple. We prefer to start with same room play then lets take it from there. We only play together unless you are very special."

 

Same room play has a couple of different meanings and either way I take it I'm confused. If you mean you do same room (watch be watched to start) then go from there, that kinda conflicts with the fact that you just said you are a full swap couple. If you mean you only play in the same room (as opposed to separate rooms), that gets confused with the next line about playing together unless you are special. Whatever it is you mean to say with those lines you might want to reword it to clarify what you meant.

 

Other than that and a couple of other spots that address similar things to the above (but again without knowing what you meant with the above I don't know if those need to be changed), it looks good.

 

Also, you might want to consider just blocking single males if you don't want ot hear from them rather than repeatedly stating that you don't want them to contact you.

[cvcple 16]

Thanks Julie. After reading it like that, it does sound confusing. We are making some changes to it.

[freshcream 43]

Hey there! We just posted our very first ad, ever, and would appreciate a little feedback.

 

FRESHCREAM on SLS

 

Thank you!

[2inSanDiego4u 181]

freshcream said:

Hey there! We just posted our very first ad, ever, and would appreciate a little feedback.

 

Your profile is pretty good. In our opinion you should remove this part:

 

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no offense, but if your old enough to be our parents, we won't just be interested

 

You've been more than clear about your age preference in two other areas of the profile, so this line is not necessary.

 

To get some more good ideas about what to incorporate in your profile, you should check out some of the regular forum poster's SLS profiles. Many of them have exceptional profiles, and we've been able to get some ideas and steal them for ours!

[freshcream 43]

I thought the age preference was more than enough, too, but we've already been contacted by two couples both in their 50's/60's, despite our clearly listed preferences! It's a bit reactionary, though - you're right - so I'll take it out.

 

Thanks for the feedback and information.

[prometheius 137]

N8ture Girl and I would welcome a review.

 

SLS - prometheius

 

Thanks for your time.

[SW_PA_Couple 4,024]

N8ture Girl and I would welcome a review.

Welcome, Prometheus, to the Swingersboard. Your SLS profile looks good. I will make this suggestion. The fewer no's or negatives you can have in your profile, the better an impression it will make. We all know that we are going to encounter insincere people at SLS. Don't give hints away to them that they are getting your goat.

 

~Michael

 

Post Script: I liked your posting in the other forum -- I too wonder where all of the natural women are hiding.

[fun4Ds 1,098]

prometheius said:

SLS - prometheius

 

Thanks for your time.

 

 

I agree with SW_PA_Couple

 

Excellent profile other than the all the No's. Most of those you will find out in person

[prometheius 137]

Thanks SW PA Couple and fun4Ds for your input. Having seen this from anothers point of view, we totally agree and have made the suggested changes. Wow, I just can't get over what a quality site this is and how great the people here are!

[JoCoCpl 99]

OK - why not. Being so new, we really have no idea what to do/say.

 

KStateCpl on SLS.

[cf29 15]

• I anyone is still reviewing couple profiles we would greatly appreciate it. Ours is located at cf29 @ swinglifestyle.com. Thanks in advance.

[fun4Ds 1,098]

JoCoCpl said:

OK - why not. Being so new, we really have no idea what to do/say.

 

I think you said things fine in your profile

 

I know Mrs.funs pic is our default pic also. Love your pic by the way But, we have pics of both of us in the private gallery.

 

Have you considered having more pics in the private area, with you both in them ?

[fun4Ds 1,098]

cf29 said:

I anyone is still reviewing couple profiles we would greatly appreciate it.

 

I'm going to accept your thank you in advance Hope you still like us after the review

 

Your first line says, Fun loving couple in love. That just strikes me as doubled up or something..... I think you should use Mrs.cf29's own wording in a few places. It looks like the male half of a couple with an unsure wife's viewpoint, filled out your profile. Where you said " and wife loved the body paint night " That makes me stop and think. Hmmm, are you wanting to do that with us I think unless you are looking for that, I would save that for conversation upon meeting. Or maybe put "We, found the body painting night very erotic " See, that would make me want to inquire. Some of that body painting is HOT

 

Then again a picture is the normal these days. Its not that it would be required on sls but your profile would definitely be overlooked unless you really have a knockout profile filled out.

 

The last line kind of kills the rest with "nothing for now". Lure us in more, make us want to contact you.

[JoCoCpl 99]

I think you said things fine in your profile

 

I know Mrs.funs pic is our default pic also. Love your pic by the way But, we have pics of both of us in the private gallery.

 

Have you considered having more pics in the private area, with you both in them ?

 

Thanks for your input! It is reassuring. And, thanks for the compliment on the pic. Mrs Joco is flattered!

 

Yes, we are planning to do more pics - just haven't really had the opportunity yet to take the time to do it right. I don't want to just throw up any old snapshot, ya know?

 

I have noticed that direct links don't end up showing the entire set of pics is that something I'm doing wrong? We have 3 on there, but only one is available with a direct link.

[fun4Ds 1,098]

I have noticed that direct links don't end up showing the entire set of pics is that something I'm doing wrong? We have 3 on there, but only one is available with a direct link.

 

I believe that by having one default pic chosen on SLS. That in turn leaves a default profile linked to us through their external profile system. They want people to sign in to see more.....

[cf29 15]

I'm going to accept your thank you in advance Hope you still like us after the review

 

Your first line says, Fun loving couple in love. That just strikes me as doubled up or something..... I think you should use Mrs.cf29's own wording in a few places. It looks like the male half of a couple with an unsure wifes viewpoint, filled out your profile. Where you said " and wife loved the body paint night " That makes me stop and think. Hummm, are you wanting to do that with us:rolleyes: I think unless you are looking for that, I would save that for conversation upon meeting. Or maybe put "We, found the body painting night very erotic " See, that would make me want to inquire. Some of that body painting is HOT

 

Then again a picture is the normal these days. Its not that it would be required on sls but your profile would definitely be overlooked unless you really have a knockout profile filled out.

 

The last line kind of kills the rest with "nothing for now". Lure us in more, make us want to contact you.

 

We appreciate you comments and yes the "nothing for now" was an oversight and is now gone. We also took a few things out as well, but now after re-reading your comments I see where you are saying that maybe some wording from the ladies point of view would be helpful, as opposed to the "WE" point of view. I always thought the 'WE' was a good thing showing we are both in this together. Maybe we will make some more changes tonight.

[jetsetduo 25]

Hi everyone...it's been a while but I thought I would give this a shot. We haven't found anyone on SLS or SDC, and haven't really gotten any emails either so perhaps our profile needs a new eye to see it. The SLS is  jetsetduo, if you're on SDC our username there is also jetsetduo I just don't know how to link to our external profile.

Thanks!

Mrs. JetSet

[SW_PA_Couple 4,024]

jetsetduo said:

Hi everyone...it's been a while but I thought I would give this a shot.

Thanks!

Mrs. JetSet

The SLS profile looks really good to me. If there is anything at all to suggest it might be about your comment, "we're not perfect . . ." People who are searching earnestly understand this without its being said. Might be perceived as a lack of self confidence.

 

Good luck in your own search and have lots of fun.

 

~Michael

[Guest winnme]

Ok!!!!!!! take a look at us and tell us what you think about our profile  on SLS -  winnme

 

you don"t have to be kind tell us what you really think....kisses

[Willing29 66]

I sometimes shy away from reviewing profiles in this thread because I'm better at just looking at the profiles Mrs.fun points out to me. Then perving the pictures . Mrs fun is the creator of our profile because I would probabaly just have written something like "Hi, wanna get together ?" So bare in mind, this is just one guy's oppinion on a rainy day

We recently changed our profile names in both SB and SLS to 'Willing29' and since thne have had over 1000 views and more than a 100 emails , so I guess it is sort of working . Although we both feel as if we are fresh meat out there and that might be the reason too. Either way all is good so far.

[LikeMinds321 1,527]

winnme said:

you don"t have to be kind tell us what you really think....kisses

I think your profile would be improved if you added public pics of your husband. There are lots of the Mrs., but none of the Mr. - at least I didn't see any.

 

LM

[Willing29 66]

I think your profile would be improved if you added public pics of your husband. There are lots of the Mrs., but none of the Mr. - at least I didn't see any.

 

LM

I agree with LM. Especially since we just renamed our account which makes it new and we are now getting so, so, so many replies. The one thing that my wife and I don't like is when someone asks us to look at their profile and they are listed as a couple but there are only photos of the lady. It doesn't have to be face shots but something give people and idea. If they are listed as a couple don't make us have to ask. So now that is one of our criteria and if no couple photos are there we just delete the mail. Not that our profile is perfect but most of our photos are of both of us. Sorry just our opinion.

[Guest winnme]

Yes you are rite Mrs LikeMinds321.... We do need the MEN in the profiles but do you know how hard it is to get a man to get on the other side of the cam ............ lol

 

 

But we will get him on there soon and THANK'S for the comment